Flash Fiction/Only Dialogue: Just Like That

“The greatest trick the devil ever pulled was convincing the world he didn’t exist.”

The Usual Suspects, 1995

“Consider this.”

“Consider what? You’ve got a fry in your hand.”

“Ignore the fry. Consider this.”

“I’m going to keep considering the fry, Donnie. You’re waving it in my face.”

“Fine… That better?”

“Yes. But now I don’t know what I’m considering.”

“This. Consider this: there are an estimated seven billion people on the earth.”

“Seven billion? Where do you get this figure?”

“Jesus, man, Wikipedia. It’s not like it’s hard to Google that for about a second and a half, and that’s one-handed while manning the porn with your other.”

“You do that while getting off?”

“It’s an example, Leon, Christ. I’m trying to make a point here: there are seven billion people on earth.”

“Fine. Seven billion people on earth.”

“Right. There are three hundred million people just in the US alone. Three hundred million, with eight million of those in New York alone.”

“Eight million? I guess I could buy it with how hard it is to get a seat on the train during a baseball game.”

“Right? So, eight million, Leon. Queens is sittin’ with two million of that. Two million from seven billion is what?”

“… How the hell am I supposed to know?”

“See, though, that’s my point. Two million from seven billion. And there are, what, four thousand kids at that school? Plus, let’s say, a hundred staff. Forty-one hundred from two million, what’s that?”

“I’m not doing the math, man.”

“No, see. Forty-one hundred. Thirty in that classroom, maybe three in the hallway.”

“Three’s still a big number.”

“But not when you scale it. Out of seven billion people on earth, only three even saw us in that hallway.”

“Three out of seven billion.”

“Three out of seven billion, Leon.”

“…”

 “You gonna finish your fries?”

“Let’s go dump the body, okay?”

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3 responses to “Flash Fiction/Only Dialogue: Just Like That”

  1. mrsdeboots says :

    I love this. So much. But I’m not a writer, so that’s as accurate as I can be.

  2. WT Dufrane says :

    kept me reading…and that’s quite the feat!

  3. caliwow says :

    The first time I ever came across the “Dialogue Only” technique was in a school-mandated book reading called Crime And Punishment by Fyodor Dostoyevsky (which I soon realized was one of those “classics” (hence the mandatory reading) and fell in love with it. Really liked your Flash Fiction with it 🙂

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